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We twist and turn in an endless dance
pulling left and right
here and there
against each other
I willfully submit to your torture
rarely breaking the dance pattern
continuously
pushing
           shoving
                      dragging
me along in your dance
a sweet ballroom number
that leaves a bitter taste
I don't like this choreography
I dislike these steps
too weak to pull away
twirling, twisting, in and out of eternities
bending to your every cue
you've convinced me to make too many
wrong moves
wrong steps
you've forced me off beat
no need for revenge
just escape
©2007-2009 ~BananaBread
:iconbananabread:

Author's Comments

An excercise for my writing class. trying to usue metaphors to explain something. I used a dance to show a conflict between two people. Hope it worked....

EDIT: once again a project for a class. I'm not emo!

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:iconsunflowerwithpower:
I really like this one. I think you got what you were aiming for when you wrote this Hannah.

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It was me....I was the turkey all along!
(as taken from Gir in Invader Zim)
:iconbananabread:
Merci! thanks thanks thanks ^-^ that makes me UBER happy!

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"on risque de pleurer si l'on s'est laisse apprivoiser" -Le Renard dans Le Petit Prince
:iconsunflowerwithpower:
Du rien! Not at all Not at all Not at all ^-^ That makes me UBER happy too!

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It was me....I was the turkey all along!
(as taken from Gir in Invader Zim)
:iconcurseyoutoheck:
OOO i liked writing that kind of poem i got the message! Twas better than mine was!

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CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU TO HECK!
:iconthecosmicweinerdog:
I always liked the whole idea of structuring words in a poem to give it a certain effect when read

it's just funny to hear such an emoish poem from a person so far from the definition of it XP

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When life gives you pies, Make Piemonade.
:iconbananabread:
lol thank you ^-^ I'm glad I'm not emo hahah.

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"on risque de pleurer si l'on s'est laisse apprivoiser" -Le Renard dans Le Petit Prince

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